Application letter:
Beh Wei Heng
1A, Kent Ridge Road,
Singapore 119224
September 3, 2011
AyoxxA Living Health Technologies Pte. Ltd.
9 Engineering Drive 1,
Block EA #03-12
Singapore 117576
9 Engineering Drive 1,
Block EA #03-12
Singapore 117576
Dear hiring manager,
I am a 3rd year undergraduate of NUS. I am majoring in Life Science and specializing in Biomedical Science. I have received the advertisement from AyoxxA looking for Scientific Research Assistants (part-time) in the form of an email, in which I am qualified and highly interested to take up the job.
I understand that Ayoxxa is developing patented technology platform in the field of protein identification and quantification. If given the opportunity, I believe I can utilize my knowledge and lab experience from Experimental Biochemistry and Molecular Biology modules to quickly adapt and conduct experiments of immunoassays.
I have lab experience in applying affinity chromatography and electrophoresis to separate proteins, which is
relevant to the job advertised. As a biology student, I have also learned to collect and process data using Microsoft Excel and present them in graphical manner to generate scientific reports.
Apart from that, I can communicate well and present a positive attitude while working in a team by being friendly and proactive. I have been joining various student committees, such as orientation committee and is able to work with others in teams or individually. With a keen interest in lab research, I am more than willing to learn new technologies and contribute my ideas for protocol revisions.
I would be grateful if you would consider me for this position. I can be reached anytime via email at Weiheng.Beh@yahoo.com or my cell phone, +6591819803.
Thank you for reviewing my letter. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
Beh Wei Heng
Enclosure: Resume
To all:
ReplyDeleteI previewed the post a few times and tried to keep the entire post in black color, but to no avail as the first few lines of the application letter keep turning white. Therefore the first few lines are originally intended to be black. Please tell me if you know what happens~ Thanks!
Hi Edward,
ReplyDeleteI have read your application letter and here are some suggestions I would like share with you!
Firstly, I like the way you illustrated your background knowledge about the developments that AyoxxA is focusing on, and by showing that you have done your background research on the developments of the company, it highlights your keen interest in joining them.
However, I feel that it would be good to further elaborate on your lab experience from Experimental Biochemistry and Molecular Biology, to make your point more concrete and persuasive. Just a suggestion, perhaps you could list down some of the key issues that you have to face while having practical lessons and show how you overcome any challenges (if any) and through the course developed certain skills further.
Also, I thought it would make your application letter more concrete and attractive for your employer to read if you could further elaborate on your communication skills and desirable traits such as having a positive attitude and being friendly and proactive.
Cheers,
Qianwen.
Hi Edward,
ReplyDeleteI feel that your application is very well structured, in the sense that I can easily spot the information I want to look. For example, as a reader, I can identify from the first paragraph who is applying for the job, and in the second and third paragraphs I see your substantiation that you are qualified for the job and the qualities you have.
You have also pointed out the relevant skills you have pertaining the to the job requirements. However, as Qian Wen has also pointed out, I would like to suggest that you could briefly touch on the skills you have learnt in the life sciences modules you have taken, as well as emphasize how different you are compared to other applicants. I noticed that the job offer requirements also included polytechnic graduates and I understand that polytechnic graduates have certain amount of field/industrial experience. Probably you could touch on FYP or other projects you have/intend to take up to build more attractive credentials. Also, if the information is available, perhaps you could include on how you can help the company achieve their goals and mission as well.
Just a little note about your last paragraph, you might want to first mention about the grant of an interview instead of requesting the consideration of accepting you for the position. Personally I feel that it would appear less demanding it that way as you do not take for granted that your application will definitely be successful (:
Cheers,
Siyuan
Hi Edward,
ReplyDeleteI do agree with Si Yuan and Qian Wen that your application letter is indeed a well-structured one. Each paragraph is actually dedicated to its own point, thus making it easier to read. :)
As Qian Wen has mentioned, perhaps you could substantiate your point on having related lab experience by illustrating the techniques you learned and/or issues you encountered during the course.
Also, for the 3rd paragraph at which you mentioned that you learned about data collection and processing,perhaps you could further illustrate your point by giving example on the software you learned before (e.g. SPSS or R-Excel) and how did they help you in this field.
All in all, I think your letter is pleasant to the eyes, but could be better modified to enable you to stand a higher chance of being shortlisted! Good luck for your application for the job! :)